Posting a porn comic I wrote and drew in which a teenaged boy rapes and enslaves the most beautiful women in the Marvel Universe, turning heroines into sluts and whores.
Let me know what you think. Any and all feedback appreciated.
First up: The Enchantress
You guys enjoying it? Any thoughts/feedback?
Thanks for the tip I will work on that.
These can be a little rushed sometime.
Enchantress has had the superiority fucked out of her and is bound to her Master's will. She, a goddess, will now serve a young boy for all time, his devoted concubine and slave.
Shall I continue?
just finished the enchantress chapter, working on a Black Widow chapter now.
I have several dc stories. wonder woman, powergirl, starfire
Awesome. Any particular likes or dislikes? What about the style?
The women are great, curvy with great tits and everything. Not really sure about specifics, I'm no artist.
I'm also pretty partial to this type of corruption story so that's also a big plus
both I'd say, equally. Both have taught me important things.
Hey if anyone cums while reading this, do me a favor and let me know where. Like, down to page and panel if possible.
It helps me know what to aim for in future comics.
Love your stuff, OP.
Ever gonna continue your Darkseid comic? You neglected Raven, Zatanna, Black Canary - a whole cadre of eligible victims.
Also, what drew you to this kind of work? Rape-fantasies and such? Does your significant other know about it?
Mary Jane, a mere mortal woman, stood no chance of resisting. She is now addicted to the semen of her Master. She will serve him forever, happily.
Next: Black Cat
She knows, she doesn't know the extent to which I produce them.
I'll finish Darkseid at some point. Black Canary, Zatanna, Supergirl still to come.
I just got into this stuff at an early age and it stuck.
You asked and you shall receive. Have to run, though, so I didn't check to see if anyone else made similar comments.
First off, impressed that anyone on /b/ has actual talent. You must be new here.
Secondly, his dialog seems out of place with his power. It's crass...that of a kid with a toy instead of a master with a plan. It's fine if he's actually a kid, but I think the phrasing could be more intelligent instead of frat boy.
Also, he dove into this whole "fuck you in the ass" thing too quickly. Again, like a kid with a new toy or a virgin getting laid for the first time. Despite being in control, her body clearly has more control over him than he does over her. He can't *wait* to fuck her, like a giddy school boy....again, not powerful or masterful.
The art is great and emotions are excellent. Her face on the edge of tears was amazing.
Fair enough, thank you for the feedback. He is supposed to be somewhat immature, as he's just a teenager, and has this ridiculous power that makes him arrogant.
Also, that's the frame where I stopped reading...oddly because I'm going to go play Marvel Heroes with a friend. So, no idea if it changes in later chapters. Keep up the good work!
Felicia's mind is broken, her body violated, her life in tatters. The only way for her to survive will be to devote herself, body and soul, to the man she now calls "Master."
Keep those comments coming! Any and all feedback welcome.
Again, if any of my comics made you cum, let me know where!
Also another nit-pick: every girl sounds the same once they're broken. Maybe that's intentional, like they're all interchangeable, but it kinds of ruins it. It'd be nice if they kept their personality afterwards, it's just completely turned to his service.
Remember how Barton and Selvig were after they were turned in the Avengers? Evil but still themselves? That's kind of what I'm thinking of, here.
Probably overthinking things. And I've seen this before, so I know Rouge has a good Southern accent.
Whatever one I responded to.
As I skim the rest, I wonder if they're all just him bringing the next conquest to him and dominating? Might need some variety. If I were truly to control these women, I'd make them do some far more interesting things. Public acts with villians, sex acts only a super-hero could do with their powers, etc.
If the intent is an immature boy with a ring, then you're getting it and that's cool. But I'd want something more... Or perhaps he works his way into it?
For example, if he's really immature, the first encounter would be fine - but should be *less* intelligent. More shocked at how, "Holy shit!! It works!" and then develops sophistication, eventually turning "evil" as suggested, but in this case evil just means really kinky in the head...basically, turning him into a /b/ro.
By the end, he's a super-sex-villain who conducts massive depraved orgies like an orchestra.
thank you for all the constructive feedback.
fyi, the heroines work in his whorehouse once they're converted
As easily as any other woman, Rogue falls, her mind bending, her soul now addicted to the cum of the man who has tamed her. Her hero's spirit, a thing of the past, replaced by the identity of a whore.
Shall I post more? Any thoughts?
I feel like if you ever do the female villains of these worlds, it'd be interesting to do a vigilante who fucks morality into them - basically sort of the opposite of the corruption going on here.
I don't know how that would work, but it might be interesting. Like some strange holy warrior reeling in 'loose' women and turning them into housewives or something.
Na, to small time. He not only has power over their bodies, but power over their actions. He could take over the world with this. Obviously, still sexually, but a whorehouse? Small potatoes...
You could actually add some plot with a 'real' villain trying to steal the ring from him and using his whores to defend himself.
Or perhaps there is one way to lose the ring? Like if he chooses not to conquer one woman, his resolve is doubted by the ring and it starts to lose power until he truly dominates her?
Or the ring loses power unless he can come up with more and more depraved acts? In order to continue conquering, he needs to go from blowjob to anal to throatfucking to torture to... Oh god, I've been on /b/ too long.
But, seriously, mind-control leads to that...
And final thought - does everyone have huge tits? I always thought of Rogue as slimmer... I honestly don't see a difference between these three conquests. I assume anyone really into the Marvel Universe would want some differentiation between each character's body and actions and reactions..
it's whatever floats your boat, since they're your stories, but I feel your scenes are very patterned
kind of like how most porn has a pattern of BJ's -> eating box -> missionary -> cum outside
Love your stuff, wish you'd do another chapter with Starfire, maybe throw Raven in the mix.