Can't get enough of this
according to the translation it says:
Hey, didn't your penis grow or anything? I just heard it from Misa, but you are desperately training it, right? But it's still not getting bigger. lol I even though I didn't do anything for it, mine grew big. The head grew too. Ahaha, it's vexing, huuuh? Your feelings of inevitable inferiority are arousing you, right? I'm sorry for being born with a giant dick.
Come to think of it, don't you have a girlfriend? That you'd be able to find romance even with your pathetic dick... Ah! Then, here's an addition to your punishment game, okay? Fix this shameful phimosis within the next three days. If you can't do it, I'll teach your girlfriend the taste of my giant headed dick! What? You don't want that? You're complaining, even though your useless dick is smaller than mine? With that genetic level of your inferior, pathetic dick, you don't have the right to talk opinions, you know? Just try hard and do your best, okay? Pathetic-dick-kun.
Finals are coming up so Ive been busy. I could probably finish a few tonight though.
Go for it.
Can't we ever get something nice? It's always being a slave, sissy, faggot or a tiny dicked loser
Doesn't he, though? I mean, don't get me wrong, I love the futadom world captions more anyone, but this thread is titled "Futa on Male Caption" and nobody has made any new captions in continuity with the old ones for a while, not even on the subreddit.
You know, I seriously believe everyone that has a sister incest fetish has never had a sister. I just don't understand how you can have any attraction for her. Anyway, any chance we can have more captions from the male's pov? I just find the resistance-acceptance-love storyline really hot from the male's point of view
Ignoring the fact I'm super slow, fantasy seems to be requested more (at least for me). I still have another Amazon request and then a hell request. The hell request could be considered cannon though.
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Here you go
Makes sense. What about mothers though?
If you provide a pic with a a reminder to make it males pov i can try. If you have a general synopsis in mind I can try for that too.
Not sure these are more popular.
Look, I don't know if I'm the odd man out here but as much as I love futa on male pics and especially captions, I hate this male binding MREA stuff. And don't even get me started about the dental torture. My boner could not die any quicker.
Any chance you will ever do more vanilla futa on male captions without dental torture? Something more along the lines of what Elzi sometimes produces because I feel like there is so much wasted potential here.
Doood what, you don't enjoy reading about having your teeth dissolved and having only floppy gums to suck at a cock with so there's no chance of accidentally biting and making her mad? This is like super convenient sounding. Dentures exist if you really want a teeth for a smile or something
it doesnt seem so bad
I agree, I like FutaxMale stuff but this stuff is just boner killing with the bonding, slavery and the teeth removal shit
Worst of all the captions are mostly written in a dry informative tone like it's a science textbook and the description of the sex itself is so unimaginative and vague it's totally unappealing
>Worst of all the captions are mostly written in a dry informative tone like it's a science textbook and the description of the sex itself is so unimaginative and vague it's totally unappealing
Awww I try. What can I do to improve?
Wow there is some real negitivity here.
Slavery is wrong in the real world but not futadom world.
And why do people keep bring up the teeth? I rarely do that anymore.
I am going to do the one that was requested last thread then this one. She is a strict mistress who adopts an abandoned male from a MREA facility.
The literal only thing I do not enjoy about this fad is the teeth removal, and that there are so low amounts of captions. My favorite ones are when the guy is forced right off the bat to be a cock-slave.
With there being some rare men who are immune to the bindings, I think the setting is fine as is. I would just like to see more captions/stories with these men. Anything from how the government and puplic deals/thinks of them to more personal levels.
The setting itself doesn't really need any changes. Some people won't like it and that's fine. It is impossible to please everyone.
Focus less on the setting, more on the sex/lust. Possibly focus more on purely dialogue/actions from the futa - the more detail you give to the individual being fucked, the less likely the audience is to identify with (as) them.
I think the setting not a bad idea at all as a backdrop, but when it becomes the majority of the text, it's definitely a boner killer. Length can probably be cut down a bit as well.
Perhaps some dialogue as larger/colored text? I love stuff that feels as if it's aimed at the reader, especially when it's aggressive/rapey.
I find it interesting that you can have threads with forced sissy usually including torture, forced TG horror stories, rape, "islamification" and the rest of the bad ends and mind fucks and yet teeth crosses the lines.
Don't get me wrong I don't like the teeth stuff at all. I find it sad. But its no worse then a lot of the stuff here.
Don't change the setting. People can get ''men getting fucked by shemales'' captions anywhere, but the setting, the intricate details, the continuity, that's what makes these captions special. Don't get hung up on boring descriptions of dicks being shoved in mouths and assholes, focus on how the characters are affected by it. Don't write about how the sex happens, write about why it happens. The things that aren't specific to this thread are all secondary. Plus, don't get rid of the 'teeth removal' thing. If people get uncomfortable, tone it down, but definitely keep it in.
Good point. New rule everyone. If you want to make a futadom world thread call it that.
All right thanks for the feedback. I have some ideas.
What do you all think of the idea of a male owned by a futa who has run of the house. Like he is the slave but won't let her leave until she combs her hair, or changes her socks. Sort of like a butler/nanny who also sucks her dick.
That is the best pic for the butler one. It will be mostly story/setting/characters with a few sex scene because that is what I like writing. That cool? I'm working on it now. With my cold it should be done in a day or so.
Ok I need some help.
It is not done but I need to go to bed. How is it? What can I do to improve it? Aside from the typos and unfinished sex scean and unfinished ending.
>Just found this site with lame pics naked real girls with cocks potoshopped on them. If someone were to change some of the best captioned ones for actual futa pics it would be really nice.
posted that in the other thread, but it seemed like this is the most appropriate place.
Personally, I think the sudden switch to subservient man-slut is a bit heavy-handed. I like it, but it is too quick, especially when the male was strongly resistant before. As for the teeth thing... It's literally the stuff of nightmares for me.
I can do that. For the currant one right? I've been working on it and my thought was that after she fed him he became loyal to her. Should it be longer? Like "Thanks for the cum bye" And then he plays that game for awhile until it's like "Now don't get the wrong idea, it's not like I like you or anything!" And he keeps sucking away until he realizes what he is and just resides he needs to help her? Or she does something amazing for him to earn his loyalty?
Nah you had it down with the former. Honestly most of what you make is ok, and you should just go with what gets you off. If you just do without worrying then you'll make plenty of ok stuff, man.
Glad you like it!
Alright today was the last day of finals so tomorrow I'll be able to post the final version. Thank's for the feedback on everything, I'm working on it now and will be going to bed soon.
I agree with you, but I don't think it's fair to just tell people to stop making a flavour of sandwich just because you don't like it.
There's nothing stopping you from creating your own captions.
Man I suck. I am a peice of shit.
Here is what i have.>>5874247 Thinking it is for that one. I think I need one last blowjob scean. What do you guys think. Any last suggestions? Any clunky stuff I could fix?
If that pic does not work does anyone have a better one?
Aside from the typos, I don't see anything wrong with it. You might want to describe the second and/or third bj with a bit more detail, but then it might get too long, and it doesn't look like there's anything to trim down as is. But as it stands now it's good, but nothing too hot.
By the by, you (or someone) might want to make a "Futadom world" thread separate from the "futa on male caption" thread, after this one goes down. Cause it seems like you've been getting a lot more hate on this thread than on the last three or four.
Anything I can do to improve it's hotness? I was thinking of describing him in that getup all the time. Like its his uniform. Does anyone have a better picture for it? That's for the feedback. It really helps. I can describe he second Beej.
Any suggestions? I've been thinking about messing with the Religion of the world. I've got a cool idea of how prayer works. Should I lay off thee MREA for a little while? What would you like to see?
Well, the MREA have gotten a bit too humanized, so giving them a break might do well. And, yeah, the religion has whole realms of possibility for expansion. I'd imagine it like that of nomadic, hunter-gatherer cultures, like with old legends of the goddess walking in the fields and giving gifts of beauty and submissiveness to males (not men, never men) and offering gifts of strength and intelligence to futas, which they would refuse thereby showing them as at least equal to the goddess. Kinda like Norse or African mythology; the kinds that show the gods as very physical beings who often interact directly with mortals.
All right. Is humanizing bad? I have a few ideas. If anyone has futa priestess/nun or at least nun that you can't see her junk so you can pretend it's futa could you post it?
And thanks for the feedback. I'll think of a few good myths.
Actually just disregard the humanization thing, I don't know what I was thinking with that. Maybe just have the MREA act indirectly. Like having people talk about the, characters hearing news about them and the like. Sorta having them be idolized among the people.
Anyway this pic might work for myths and the like...
Do you feel it kills the infallibility of the MREA? Over all weakens them?
So for other religions. I know very little of the African religions. Vaguely remember Anansi the spider. As for Norse I know them better but it has been a while since I read any of the poetic edda.
Just more human gods such as the Norse? Drama gods such as the the Greeks? Are you looking for lore or actual interaction, pr both?
Well I FINALLY got it done. I fix typos just point them out. How is it? I am looking forward to the religious one.
I really prefer the ones with less text.. Is that the same as this, or just another category?
A lot of caption writers use it as an excuse to dump volumes of prose on you. I hated my English teachers for going on and on about what I thought were stupid and obvious ideas, but apparently the whole "show don't tell," "less is more," and "keep it simple, stupid" lessons never really stuck for most people.
To put it another way: some people like to use pictures to enhance their existing fantasies, and that's fine; however, skilled writers can enhance a picture *and* create a wider fantasy with a limited amount of text.
>skilled writers can enhance a picture *and* create a wider fantasy with a limited amount of text.
I get the feeling you guys don't like my captions. Anything I can do to improve or is it just a style thing?
Not him, but I get the feeling he wants you to try to write shorter captions. But this is just inference from
>"show don't tell," "less is more," and "keep it simple, stupid"
so who knows.
If you ever feel like it could you read some of mine and let me know? I like feedback
Are all mine.
I really like it. It turns the normal story on its head a bit, because he did still cave to the cum but he seems to be the dominant in the relationship. Sure, he bottoms, but she's not really calling shots, he's bossing her around.
Thanks! Sorry about that
Fixed it here.
I'm really glad to hear that. I work pretty hard on this world. Thanks for giving me your time and reading them! More is one the way!
I'm glad I was able to make a nicer one. I'm trying to keep this world rough enough for the masochists and nice enough for everyone else.
Honestly, I don't even read the binding captions to fap. I enjoy the plots more; I love stories of loving femdom futas taking care of their males and making them feel safe and secure. Too much femdom is about putting the men down and making them feel inferior.
Use better fonts. >>5855720 is an example of a pretty egregious offender of poor font face. Make sure you use anti-aliasing, too. Slightly related, don't save as compressed jpgs. >>5855736 has some pretty ugly artifacting around the text.
>>5855690 Don't use yellow text on white background.
>>5855686 >>5854728 Center alignment doesn't work that well for big blocks of text.
>>5855689 Try to use more line breaks, especially for dialogue-heavy paragraphs. Like in this pic, the middle paragraph is just a giant block. The colors don't even help that much because line wrap just makes it a mess. It would probably be okay to make your thinner images wider to help with this. Think the 16:9 ratio that most monitors have.
And there's also some grammar problems, but that shit's a pain in the ass to work with without plain text. Here's how I'd edit the first few paragraphs of >>5884128. http://pastebin.com/AZTuFyai
Main problem outside of grammar is how you introduce quotes. Technically you don't even need it most of the time.
>“I thought you were independent and free?” I asked.
It's obvious who's saying it, especially if you color the text, so the "I asked" isn't really necessary in this case. And it doesn't even look that good because it's unclear if "I asked" is its own sentence or a continuation of "and free?"
There's also a lot of quotes that don't end in punctuation.
>“Thanks” He mumbled as he sauntered out of the room
>“Are you really going outside looking like that? People will think you're some kind of savage!” No that won’t do at all” And he proceeded to comb my hair like I was a child.
Also, you use two-dot ellipses and use two spaces after sentences, both of which are non-standard.
My mother, who often comes to me for editing assistance on her important business e-mails, works at a company where they mandate using two spaces after sentences.
Drives me up the wall.
Fixed some typos. The next one is about a religious festival. Males pray by sucking off the priestess and "praying" into her cock. She then says what she thinks he SHOULD pray out loud. So might pray "please free me from this" while sucking her off but she prays "Thank you for my mistress.
Sorry for being a bit offtopic, but does anyone know what is up with captions on /d/ at the moment? I've heard caption threads are being deleted by mods, but AFAIK no official statement has been made about them.
Anyone care to enlighten me about this?
I don't mind doing it. What were you looking for in it? It will be a few days till I can get to a computer though. Doing it on my phone will be a pain.
Just google d caption booru. I don't rember adress.
This, damn I'm not going to read a paragraph just to get off a Nigga wanna bust a nut quick. Sheit can't focus on the picture while readin a sea of text, ya feel me? I mean if you like it more power to ya ya dig but goddamn I wanna fap, not read a mini novel sheeiiiiit!
Would love some critique on this. I've done storywriting, but never a story with pic like this.