Why is this thread allowed when it's full of captions?
Whenever I see a caption get posted in any other thread it gets deleted and the threads themselves barley last an hour before they get deleted. What the fuck is up with the cancer mods on this board..
Not sure if this belongs here but does anyone have a higher res version of this pic?
I hope this one counts
I do, but it's shota, so I can't post it
I never realized how much of a kink I had for this until I saw this thread. Its always been something gnawing away at my subconscious that I thought wasn't anything major. I hope one day I can act this out and be a real 'mommy'.
These threads and this kind of content always pisses me off a bit. See, I want to enjoy pictures with long-written captions in the form of short stories, I REALLY do as I am a writer myself, but they're always shit. I mean they're *always* shit. Poorly written, forced dialog, childish language and even terrible formatting. Seriously? You can't even do the most basic fucking formatting for these things?
Take this one for example:
From a quick glance I can tell it has far too many ellipses, it's one long continuous monolog and it's not formatted at all. Someone clearly made a text box but decided to leave it centered rather than set it to justified and forgot to space the edge of the box away from the edge of the picture. But the biggest problem is the content of the text itself: absolutely filled with poorly thought-out redundant exposition. It starts out alright, but the narrative flow comes to a screeching halt with the line:
"..Hm? I'm not your real mother?"
It just gets progressively worse and worse like that. Don't even get me started with how stupid the line "so it seems you came" is.
This one is immediately painful to look at with the dark blue text on a bright background. The black outline is perfect to let it stand out on its own as white text, why make it darker? Once again the problems outline above return, the text is centered and going so close to the edge it even gets cropped at the top of the picture. It's not quite as expository as the first example but all the annoying bits are there.
Finally I'll just go over this one:
The text looks fine, it's short and concise so being centered is fine as long as it's lined up with the respective character, but the problem here is the usage of asterisks to denote an action. This is not erp, you just don't do this. The one time you should ever do this is with actions that can't actually be typed as an onomatopoeia. Laughter and giggling most certainly can.
Your not wrong, your not alone, but nobody cares. A cardinal rule of /d/ is dont complain unless something isnt in keeping with the thread topic. If we started policing this board based on quality there would be a flame war to last a thousand years.
>IT'S PORN DAMMIT
So because it's porn I shouldn't have standards? In regards to text, your standards should be even higher, not lower.
>so do one yourself
Post a picture you want a caption on and I will, just for the sake of argument.
>we just wanna see Momdom porn you fucking idiot
It must be so easy to go through life being able to find pleasure in shit content. Pat yourself on the back.
>If we started policing this board based on quality there would be a flame war to last a thousand years.
I didn't complain about posting, I didn't complain about the thread. My complaint was purely personal and I felt I had to get it off my chest since it gets posted on /d/ so often and, like I expressed, I WANT to like it, but every single thread of this subject is shit. It's disappointing because I hope the next one will be better. It never is. Thusly I finally posted about it.
>If you can do better, you have one job.
Like I said to the other anon, post a pic you want a new caption on and I'll write on it. I'll contribute.
maybe doesn't fit the theme entirely, but i'm interested in what you'll come up with.
Your critique is shit and you're an awful author. I can tell because the only part of your criticism that had explanations or solutions to your points had to do with formatting of the text itself and not the actual writing. Surely a high caliber writer would have more to offer than, "dis is hard on my eyez pls change!"
How are these poorly written? Point out specific parts, and explain how you think they could be better. Don't just trash somebody's caption without any explanation.
>But the biggest problem is the content of the text itself: absolutely filled with poorly thought-out redundant exposition.
That's kind of how the monologue style of caption works. The point is to allow the reader to feel like they're in the subject's shoes. How else do you expect the situation to be conveyed without a writer's convenience every other sentence?
I'm inclined to believe that the captions themselves are fine and you're just a stuck-up cunt based on the fact that most of your criticism is niggling over the poor font choices.
Maybe it's just because captions tend to just be the speech of the characters but all the descriptive stuff is a little unnecessary. Makes it a little meandering.
Read it and ask yourself 'can I fap to this?'.
Not even saying the bar is particularly high but, writer or no, a few of the ones already posted are better than this.
>...he whined like a puppy, pressing his upright penis...
>He jumped a little at his mother's touch, reaching gently...
Holy Christ Anon, you can't even use consistent verb tenses and you're criticizing others' works? Go back to your high school english class you little cunt.
Writing guide: https://owl.english.purdue.edu/owl/resource/601/04/
Your writing is garbage, too. Talking about narrative flow coming to a screeching halt? Your opening line is awkward as hell and your writing looks like it was written as part of a gradeschooler's first exercises in forming sentences. Is there a single example of a verb without an adverb as well?
>reached up nervously
>clamped his lips anxiously
>excitedly ... throbbed
>kissing him lovingly
It is obnoxious to read. Try learning from this: http://www.writersdigest.com/editor-blogs/guide-to-literary-agents/subverting-adverbs-and-cliches
>As he reached up nervously in a panic
This is contradictory. Did he reach with nervous hesitation or panicked swiftness?
Please Anon, it would be better for everyone if you took a swim with some hungry crocodiles before the next time you try to post some "criticism". But hey, at least your font color scheme looks nice!
at least now you know there is someone who cares as much about the writing as you do bro.
it is my fervent hope that you two exchange e-mails and have great tsundere fights about narrative flow and sentence structure before you give in to your love of each other, grammar, sentence structure, and sucking dick.
now quit whining and start posting more oc of moms fucking their sons.
start by captioning this.
you're right, but i just wanted some more fucking shit posted in this thread even if it is a little more off topic, so i'm searching through my folder and this was the first thing that almost sort of maybe fit the description
>Read it and ask yourself 'can I fap to this?'.
If it were my fetish, I would.
>Your writing is garbage, too.
Everyone had an opinion.
>Please Anon, it would be better for everyone if you took a swim with some hungry crocodiles before the next time you try to post some "criticism".
Let's see you do better than I did in less than an hour. No? Then shut the fuck up.
When I'm masturbating I don't have a whole lot of mental capacity for appreciating good writing. I actually prefer the repetitive monologue because without it I have to just keep rereading it anyways with dick in hand
Fuusen Club is great when it comes to momdom & wincest:
There is Scat Hypnosis Porn of Toriel, if I remember correctly.
I'm not sure if a "Mom that dominated you (in a video game)" counts for this thread, but I'm sure posting it.
Yes, it is an artist.
I must have spelled the name wrong.